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What Else could
Love Be?

showing tone while extending a unique metaphor about a chosen emotion

A classic song by Pat Benatar is inspiring student writers to try new techniques with the traits of voice and idea development.Join us in teaching (and adapting) this on-line lesson and sharing your students' work.

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Student Samples: High School

Love is a Bumper Sticker
by Laura, ninth grade poet

Love is a bumper sticker
Once plastered on in ardent emotion and a flicker
   of something that was in you eyes
Passion, wasnt it?
You try and remember now as you rock in your wicker
Passing-by thoughts to the metronome time-ticker
   that taunts you from the dashboard
Sure, the stickers peeling and the rust grows thicker
But its still there nonetheless.
Youll always know you pickeder
(Well, isnt that a kicker?)
Loves left its mark and its trail of mess
Lanes behind you, at the stoplight, and cars to your left.
You can never drive too fast to escape
   the bumper sticker
Love, it clings like a bumper sticker.

Love is a Treasure Hunt
by Tanis, twelfth grade poet

You've traversed land and sea,
counted your steps,
checked your bearings,
but your time spent
on searching
for buried treasure
has yielded nothing.
You can't search for love.
 
You have no map,
and your wandering is useless.
You'd best just stay put.
Take a rest
and then start digging
into the ground on which you now stand.
 
Clunk!
Your shovel scrapes against
that valued thing, that treasure you seeked
but only found when
you stopped searching.
 
The beach kept it hidden
until you dared
to finally look past the surface.
Now, as you pull it up from the ground,
the chest gets lighter, easier to lift,
Wanting to come to you.
 
You sit it atop the earth,
having recovered it from the depths,
and take a seat beside it,
looking it over,
brushing sand away.
The lock gleams,
but you have no key.
 
No, don't go looking. 
Patience will be provident.

 


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