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 Student Samples:
A Scientific Mishap
organizing a story with purposeful paragraphs
The creativity of author Dav Pilkey inspired student writers to try new techniques with the traits of organization and idea development.
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Grades K, 1, 2, 4, 6, 8, 10, 11, 12
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Student Sample: Early Elementary
 Robot Lizard
by Christopher, third grade writer
One day in my lab, I was working on an antidote gun. Instead of grabbing the antidote, I grabbed the lizard DNA and put it in the gun. I checked if it caused effects, then I gave myself a shot and felt very strange. Next, metal attached itself to my body. I saw I was turning into a robot lizard. When my eyes changed, I blacked out.
After my transformation was complete, I woke up feeling powerful. When the janitor came into the lab, he was looking at me. He was so scared he got on the phone at called 911. The police came and started shooting at me. With lightning speed, I avoided the bullets. After that, I broke their guns and patrol cars and escaped.
After I escaped, a skyscraper was in my way. With one jump, I leaped over the building and landed on my feet. When running in the city, I saw a helicopter land in my way. Out came Captain America, Iron Man, Thor, Spiderman, and the Black Panther. I fought them by using my claws, but I was no match for them. They defeated me and I blacked out.
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Student Sample: Upper Elementary
 Plaoctopus
by Dominic, fifth grade writer
It was a dark stormy night when I just finished my mixing potion. I could smell the foul scent of the steam drifting from the potion. Then it happened! A tornado had hit. I could feel powerful gusts of wind rushing across my skin. It let out my test subjects: a platypus and a octopus. At the same time, everything in my lab had broken, even my mixing potion. Right then, my test subjects ran over it. Both of them. Then I saw an incredible thing!
My test subjects had morphed together to make a plaoctopus. I couldn’t wait to make another plaoctopus. I couldn’t wait to study my magnificent creature. I could see slimy, green, tentacles, a sun-yellow beak, and purple fur all over its body. It was the best and craziest thing that I had seen in my life.
As mentioned earlier, instantly I couldn’t wait to study him. When he talked, he sounded like, like a weird squeaking noise. It was the most awesome experience I had in a long time.
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Student Sample: Middle School
 Womingo
by Kyle, seventh grade writer
We were all pouring and mixing chemicals and fixing up machines when Professor Lixten dropped a beaker on the ground. All of the bluish, clear liquid that it contained was lost and spilled on the linoleum tile. At the same time, Professor Hyken was crossing the lab with two beakers of the solution that caused a chemical reaction that joined things together.
Professor Hyken slipped on the bluish, clear liquid, and went tumbling to the floor, releasing her beakers containing the solution. They flew through the air and hit Professor Whitney Pafferton. Professor Pafferton began running and screaming as the fluids from the beakers swamped over her like it was raining thick, sweaty water. She ran around the room like there was a monster chasing her and ripping at her ankles. She screamed as if trying to wake the dead from their graves. Then she smacked Professor Hickman’s ladder, and he fell down as he tried to reach something to break his fall. He grabbed a light bulb hanging from the ceiling, and he pulled it out of the socket as he fell to the floor. The ladder crashed down and hit the test animals’ cages and opened them. All the animals escaped, including the flamingo. Professor Pafferton kept running around until she tripped, falling into the flamingo. They fell to the ground, and they were both knocked unconscious. Together they formed WOMINGO.
Professor Pafferton woke up twenty minutes later, and she saw the room trashed with broken light bulbs and broken beakers on the floor. There were fluids on the floor. She saw Professor Hyken cowering under a desk. Professor Pafferton stood up and walked over to the mess of spilled chemicals on the floor. She heard a clack, clack—like hard nails on the ground—as she walked. She looked at her feet, and she realized they were pink and scaly. Then she looked at her arms. There were little feathers sprouting out of her skin! The professor looked down at a puddle of chemicals and saw a beak growing where her mouth once was. She yelled, “No, I am a monster!”
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Student Sample: High School
 Mandingo
by Jessie, ninth grade writer
As I was making a batch of gingerbread cookies, I ran out of vanilla extract. I went to look in my dad’s laboratory, seeing as he always uses the ingredients in there, I thought I could find a substitute. All I had found was a goopy pink liquid with a name on the label I couldn’t even pronounce. I figured it would be just as good, seeing as it smelled similar to vanilla. So I mixed it into the batter concoction and plopped it into small puddles on a cookie sheet and set them in the oven to cook. Unable to help myself, for a treat I licked the spoon before I washed the dishes.
All of a sudden from the other room I heard banging and lots of steam rushing from the room. Just as I walked in, the oven door flew open and a dozen pink flamingos burst out and knocked me over. As I was lying on the floor with all of these exotic birds surrounding me in my kitchen, it hit me that I had just eaten some of the mixture!
Of course, as I stood up I slowly began to feel my legs become limber and more skinny. Then my neck grew, my body became stout, and I could see a beak in front of my face. Then my body puffed and pink feathers appeared all over me. It seems I won’t be eating cookies anytime soon. I’m on an all-fish diet now, and I’ll stick to recipes without any substitutes!
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